[Ana]

Thanks ^^ The main thing that I know is an issue is pacing and potentially continuity, since the chapters were written weeks, sometimes months apart. I also know I tend to be a bit... overly flowery, and I'm worried it can come across pretentious, so any suggestions on avoiding that are appreciated. Also, let me know if you notice any holes in descriptions and such. And general grammar issue, of course. The comma is my friend, lol.